Another successful Camp!

YAY! Last day of camp and I made it!

 

 

60,000 words! Woo hoo! It was a struggle, this time but I’m here at the end of it! YAY!

The story is so jumbled and confused and all over the place. I think the basic idea is good, but I suspect if I work with it any more it will be a rewrite after a bit of planning, rather than an edit of what I’ve written so far.

 

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The Unfinished Journals of Elizabeth D – read-a-long #3

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this book. Nichole Bernier does such a great job of digging into the fears we all have, of showing the fears and other emotions that affect how we act/react in daily life.

Overall I think the message of this book is one of how similar we all really are underneath. We may react differently to life’s events, but overall we are the same. I also think there is a message towards the positives of being open. We fear so much – but if we are open to one another we learn how similar we all are, and can have deeper relationships from it.

Look at Kate, reading the journals. She discovered an Elizabeth she had never known and when she came to the end of the journals she found herself grieving again – not for the Elizabeth she had known, but the Elizabeth she hadn’t, and only now was beginning to meet.

At first I assumed that Dave had taken the last journal. I was so angry at him for it! When I realised it was missing I skimmed through the last  section, hoping to see sections of text in italics to show that Kate had indeed found the journal. When I couldn’t find the italics I felt cheated somehow. But Nichole wrapped up the end of the story satisfactorily – without the need to ‘read’ that last journal.

The ending was quite unexpected – while I began to doubt that Elizabeth was having an affair, the idea of Michael as a healer of some form. At first I assumed Elizabeth was seeking help for depression, but when the true reason came out everything fell into place. I understood Dave, and felt sorry for him.

The argument between Dave and Kate gives another insight into life in general. Dave accuses Kate of using Elizabeth, of only seeing her as a mother. Yet Kate’s response is equally valid – that the identity of ‘mother’ is the one Elizabeth presented to the world, she hid all other sides of herself. How often do we do that? Hide the truth due to fear of what those nearest us might think. I am guilty. There are few who know of my writing, of my desire to be a published author. I am becoming braver, as more of my short stories are published (or accepted for publication) I find myself feeling a little more confident, a little more able to share my writing with my family and friends. Unlike Elizabeth I have not hid this from my closest family and friends, but there are still members of my immediate family who do NOT know that I write at all.

I liked the first paragraph on the final page “It was all so exhausting, trying to be understood. She’d once read a quote… that had stuck with her: If you knew all there was to know about a man, you could forgive him anything. There was something reflexive in the forgiveness, but of course, once you knew what made a person into a collection of oddities and defenses. The work to reach the knowing was exhausting, not the forgiving. That seemed to happen on it’s own.”

I really enjoyed being part of the read-a-long – it’s interesting to hear others views on the book, and what parts others picked up that I missed, or didn’t really think about in terms of the larger story.

Thanks very much to Bree at 1girl2manybooks@wordpress.com for hosting us and Allen and Unwin for providing the book! 🙂

The Unfinished Journals of Elizabeth D – Nichole Bernier – Read-a-long

 

This is part 2 to the read along of The Unfinished Journals of Elizabeth D. Again – SPOILER ALERT and check out Bree’s blog for more discussion!! http://1girl2manybooks.wordpress.com/2012/08/22/the-unfinished-journals-of-elizabeth-d-by-nichole-bernier-read-a-long-discussion-part-2/

PS This probably won’t make much sense unless you’ve been following along – for the first section check out: http://1girl2manybooks.wordpress.com/2012/08/15/the-unfinished-journals-of-elizabeth-d-by-nichole-bernier-read-a-long-discussion-week-1/

and my first post: https://heatherj22.wordpress.com/2012/08/15/the-unfinished-journals-of-elizabeth-d-read-a-long-2/

p201 Max says “Well’ her family isn’t seeing that trunk again anyway unless you make peace with the fact that you can’t control the way she is going to be remembered. What she did is what she did.”

This quote relates to what we were talking about last time – about whether or not her journals should be shared with her children. And I suppose it made me think of other things too – if the journals are an honest account of our lives – why shouldn’t our children/loved ones read them? What are we afraid of that we hide away the true parts of ourselves from those we are closest too? We assume our emotions are unique, that no one else feels the way we do, yet of course everyone has a range of emotions and feelings. Perhaps by reading the journals Elizabeth’s children will be able to better understand their mother, and maybe even themselves and the consequences of their own actions.

From the reading so far it is easy to see ‘blame’ on both sides as to why Elizabeth had an affair (if that indeed is what happened). There were moments where she should have recognised something in Dave – p. 167 “I know this should be telling me something important, something I should be noting carefully… It’s about what you owe to someone who is in a bad way, a pact you made when you enter into a relationship… to see her out of this world as she saw you through it.” And yet she dismissed it, or ignored it and continued on, as though this would not matter at a later date. And then when it did happen, when she got sick and he did not contact her, she still let it pass and took him back afterwards. She knew from the outset what he would be like. Though I guess that happens to us all – there are things we don’t want to see, facts which, if acknowledged, would have led us to make a different choice to the one made. Kate sums this up well: “The effects of your choices might not be clear at the moment they were made. But if you turned back to see where you’d come, there they’d be, the ghost of the path not taken leading to the places you would never go.” p. 172

I no longer feel sorry for Dave, and that’s probably not fair – but I’m seeing him as a weak individual who would rather run from any pain than face it and deal with it and I’m guessing that is what has sent Elizabeth off – again assuming that is what has happened.

I want to know what’s missing from the journal – what pages Elizabeth tore out…

I have to admit, Kate is annoying me with her paranoia – her obsession over what might go wrong. Fear of terrorist attacks in Indonesia, of germs the baby wild rabbits might be carrying. She is so focused on what could go wrong.

And these are some other quotes that really stood out:

“I have to accept that I have no more idea of what happens in the solitary parts of his mind than he has of mine, and wonder if all couples are like this. In love and simpatico in many ways, but ultimately unknowing and unknowable.” p 256

“In the end I go back to that same feeling I’ve always had about confidences. The other person rarely has anything useful to offer and usualy you leave feeling no better, sometimes worse.” p. 258.

“What if all mothers experienced times of hopeless obliteration, and no one told?” p 263

Camp Update

I realised that I have not updated you all on my progress in Camp Nano this month!

Sadly, progress has slowed. I wrote the final scene of my novel at around 30k, and writing the remaining 60k goal I set for myself has been an uphill battle. So far I’m still on track, and I wrote enough during the first two weeks that I can now cut back my daily word goal to 1500 words per day and still be on track to reach the 60 by 31 August.

So what went wrong? I introduced some great ideas into my story to begin with, but somewhere over churning out all those words I forgot to continue the great bits. Now I am trying to go back, and recapture those brilliant pieces of story ideas, but I just can’t seem to get the same sense about them. It feels forced, chunky. Most of what I am writing now is repetitive – a rewriting of past sections, not intentional but somehow still happening – as I try to get to that elusive 60k. And it feels elusive. Word count as it stands is 42,483, but I haven’t completed today’s 1500 yet, in fact I haven’t even reached 200 words. But I’m stubborn when I want to be – and I know I can get to 60k in a month, so I am determined to do it again!

But for now – I need to write another 1330 words before bed…

More Stories by Me

Today I have had two more stories published!

“One” at http://www.freeflashfiction.com/index.php/stories-artwork/science-fiction-and-fantasy/one-by-heather-jensen/

One is a flash fiction – just over 400 words. It is a fantasy, telling the story of the Norse God’s desire to destroy the world and start again and Freya’s attempt to save it.

and

“Sanctuary” at http://www.fivestopstory.com/read/story.php?storyId=3157 (If you like this one, you can click the blue heart at the bottom!) 🙂

Sanctuary is a little different to my more recent writing. I wrote Sanctuary about 5 years ago, at a guess, and while looking through my old work thought it would be a good length to submit to the Five Stop Story monthly competition. I gave it a quick edit, but was not confident that it would receive an award of any sort – so the Honorary Mention was most unexpected!

The Unfinished Journals of Elizabeth D – read-a-long

Check out Bree’s blog here for more comments on the read-a-long so far. (Warning – Bree’s blog and the following post both contain spoilers to what happens in the book – up to page 136).

I am thoroughly enjoying this book!!

The Unfinished Journals of Elizabeth D begins a few months after the death of said Elizabeth, who has left her journals – a large collection she has been writing in since early teens – to her friend Kate – and not her husband Dave. Dave has browsed through the most recent journal and found references to another man, jumping to the conclusion Elizabeth was having an affair.

Kate, her husband Chris and two children have gone away on their annual holiday, extending it this time by 7 weeks due to the death of Elizabeth, and Kate takes this time to read through the journals, starting at the beginning. Kate is surprised to find an Elizabeth who is largely unfamiliar. As Kate discovers Elizabeth’s secrets she begins to question how well we really know those around us.

Bree has asked a few questions in her post about the book so far:

Do any of our read-a-long participants keep diaries or journals, no matter how frequently? If so, have you ever thought about what might become of them after you are gone? If you had a choice, what would you want done with them?

I have kept journals on and off since I was about 12. Some were written in daily, whilst others are lucky to have a few weeks worth of entries. But I have always been aware that others might read them and that has definitely affected what I have written in them (When I have something serious to vent I write it on loose paper and burn it!). I would hope that if something happened to me my partner would read them and keep them for my children for when they are older.

 If you were the recipient of someone’s journals, would you read them? Or would you destroy them unread, so that their thoughts would rest with them? Or maybe you’d keep them until their children were old enough to decide what to do with them?

I would be reading journals someone had left to me for sure! And I would keep them for her children no matter what they held. For me, it’s like something Chris said early on – about Kate making a choice about what Dave and the kids need to know, about what’s best for them. But like Chris is saying – it’s not really Kate’s place.

I feel sorry for Dave. He has lost his wife, only to learn that her journals – the keepers of all her secrets, are to go to a friend, instead of him, her husband. Then he discovers proof (he thinks) that she was having an affair. To be honest if I was in his shoes I don’t think I could have resisted reading the journals, even though they hadn’t been left to me.

There is so much to talk about in this book. So many points where I felt a heartbreak for what was happening – p. 9 when Elizabeth’s son Jonah says “Did you know my mum is dead?” and there is that awful pause before Chris kneels down and says “I know buddy. I’m really sorry about that. My mom’s dead too. It’s hard isn’t it.”

I recorded so many other comments but here’s just a few. On p 19 Kate notes that the journals were agitating the healing process. It is partly for this reason I would give the journals back after I’d read them. No matter how hurtful the truth is, the not knowing, the lack of certainty means there is no room for Dave and the kids to move past what happened.

And p 20 “to free the key she had to relock the trunk, an excluding click that felt a further insult to [Dave]”.

At one point Kate found herself responding to the journals, like she was speaking with Elizabeth of that time. “Don’t trust him.” But she acknowledged that, “of course, whatever was done, was done.” p 75

I could talk about this book for hours, pages, but I’ll leave it here.

Next week we’ll have the next discussion (pp 137-272) So keep an eye out for that! And if you’ve read the book and would like to comment – feel free! 🙂 (Just up to p 136 though – I haven’t read the rest yet!!) 🙂

The Unfinished Journals of Elizabeth D – read-a-long

This month I am taking part in my first online read-a-long hosted by Bree at All The Books I Can Read.

The book is The Unfinished Journals of Elizabeth D by Nichole Bernier (provided by Allen & Unwin), and while I’ve only just started the book – I’m only a dozen pages in – I’m hooked already!

I’m so looking forward to discussing it with the others, starting next Wednesday 15th August. The discussion will continue for three weeks as we make our way through the book. Be aware though, the comments will contain SPOILERS so if you want to read the book but don’t want to know what happens, don’t read too far ahead! 🙂

Unholy Night by Seth Grahame-Smith – review

I have had amazing luck winning books from Allen & Unwin’s Facebook page! (https://www.facebook.com/AllenandUnwinBooks)

This month it was Unholy Night by Seth Grahame-Smith.

Now, to be completely honest – I thought it was a book about vampires. My reason for this is that part of the prize was a movie ticket to see Abraham Lincoln Vampire Hunter (haven’t seen it yet, still trying to organise babysitters), and I assumed that Unholy Night was the next in the series. Not so.

Unholy Night is the story of Balthazar, one of the Three Wise Men who were present at the birth of Jesus. Balthazar is a man of no religion and a thief. Balthazar’s presence at Jesus’s birth (or shortly thereafter) is purely by chance – after escaping certain death by execution – and saving two other men, Gaspar and Melchyor, in the process – Balthazar is simply looking for a place to hide. He brings Frankincense, Myrrh and Gold – but not as gifts for Baby Jesus, rather they are items he has stolen so he might have coin for the coming days as he tries to escape the fury of Mighty King Herod.

Balthazar’s intentions are to abandon Joseph, Mary and Jesus the next morning, after he and his companions have managed to get some rest. In the meantime however, Herod has learnt that the ancient prophecy has come true – as a star larger than any before seen lights up the Eastern sky, signifying the birth of baby Jesus. He flies into a rage and demands that all boys under the age of 2 be killed. The soldiers ride into Bethlehem, and begin slaughtering children before Balthazar’s eyes. For something as terrible as this Balthazar cannot sit idly by, and he, Gaspar and Melchyor fight the soldiers and help Joseph and Mary escape Bethlehem.

The story continues with the unlikely companions travelling together towards Egypt – while Herod and Pontius Pilate work together to bring in the infant and the theif. They face major adversity, and on several occasion seem to face certain death. During the story we learn more about Balthazar, and the event from his past that will not let him leave baby Jesus to the Romans

Seth Grahame-Smith has woven a marvelous tale – I believed every word of it.

Small Successes! :)

I just found out last night that my short story ‘Sanctuary’ has received an honorary mention in Five Stop Story’s June Competition!

It will be published on their site later this month. I’ll keep you posted! 🙂

(www.fivestopstory.com)

Camp Nano! 4 days in

I love Camping. The fire, the fresh air, the lack of stuff separating me from the natural world. There’s a freedom to it, I think. Though I don’t think I could live that way permanently – through storms and rains and wind. No electricity – no laptop – no internet.

Camp Nano is the next best thing. It’s imagining that I’m away at camp – breathing the fresh air, smelling the bush smells, enjoying the freedom. While being safely ensconced in my home – by the warmth of the fire, with the convenience of the internet, and Word. I type fast – I’ve been gradually increasing my speed over the years of doing Nano, and I can churn out 2500 words in half an hour – if I’m on a roll. I haven’t so far this Camp Nano, but I’m sure I’ll get there in the end. If I had to write on paper I dread to think how long it would take me, though I’m thinking of challenging myself to the task next Camp Nano (next year). For now I want to focus on typing my story.

I’ve done well so far. I have a personal goal for August Nano of 60,000 words, 2000 per day, and I’ve reached it so far. Yay! What’s better is I exceeded it this morning: 4340 words. And more in me – I want to reach 5000 today, it’s only 660 words to go, I’m sure I could do it. But the housework is piling up – dishes from yesterday need to be washed, and wet clothes are waiting to be hung out to dry… the guilt is crippling!

Ha! No – no crippling housework guilt here. Bugger it – I’ll do it later. After I reach my 5000 words!

(I’ll post a comment below later to let you know how I go!)